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Sing LIEW
Blk 88 Bedok North Ave 7
#11-1964
Singapore 460088
65-98777777
liews_ryan@ymail.com
September 4, 2009
Exelon Corporation
10 South Dearborn Street, 48th Floor
P.O.Box 805398
Chicago, Illinois 60680-5398
Dear Hiring Professionals,
I am writing to apply for the position of Nuclear Equipment Operator (job ID: 7417). My proven track record of successfully performing uranium atom analysis as my Final Year Project (Honors) makes me an ideal candidate for the Nuclear Equipment Operator that you listed through Exelon’s Career.
You specify that you are looking for someone with Bachelors of Science degree in engineering, engineering technology, or related science program. I have just finished my study of Bachelors of Science (Physics major) with 2nd lower honors. My final year project allowed me to have detail study of uranium, which is the main source for nuclear power, as well as its operation’s principles.
This final year project also allowed me to have a chance to work closely with my supervisor as well as a lot of engineering students. I believe that as a nuclear equipment operator, he/she will never work alone. Therefore, interpersonal skills play an important role in the job and I am well equipped with these skills through my final year project.
I am excited about the opportunity to join the field as it will allow me to have further understanding of nuclear power and apply what I have learnt from my degree study for real-life applications. Thank you so much for your time and consideration.
Yours sincerely,
Sing LIEW
Hi Ryan,
ReplyDeleteTalking about your FYP being related to this job certainly gives you the upper hand among others.
Perhaps you can put in in more details what interpersonal skills you are equipped with. In my opinion "interpersonal skills" is too general.
With regards,
Pak Ming
Hi Pak Ming,
ReplyDeleteAfter reading my own post again and again, i have to agree with you that i need to further "elaborate" on it. Thanks!
Cheers,
Ryan
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ReplyDeleteHi Ryan,
ReplyDeleteThis is a very good application letter. You have related your FYP to the job requirements very wisely. However in my opinion, it is not necessary to tell the potential employers your honors degree is second lower. If there is another candidate graduated with a first honor, they may choose him instead of you. I’m not saying that a second lower honors degree is not good. It’s just that it seems a bit unwise to tell your potential employers your weakness in the first letter you write to them. Point me out if have other ideas.
Regards,
Danhua
Hi Danhua,
ReplyDeleteBefore i upload the post, i am struggle with the same question!
Anyway, i have to tell my potential employer my result in my resume; that's why i decided to state my result in my cover letter as well.
Well, i got your point and thank you so much for sharing your opinion!
Cheers,
Ryan
Hi Ryan,
ReplyDeleteIt is good that you used your FYP to say why you are suitable for the job. I believe it will place you at a better position. Like Dan Hua mentioned I believe there is no need to state your honors in the cover letter. I think the cover letter is to impresses the hiring professionals to the best extend so that they are interest in looking at your resume. Hence, saying anything that might give other applicants with better honors a chance is better avoided. But don’t get me wrong, 2nd honors is good.
Cheers,
Keerth
Hi Ryan,
ReplyDeleteYour letter is brief and succinct. The fact that you have clearly stated the job ID and its extensive research that you plough through regarding the company (which you posted above your cover letter) speaks volume about your pro-active and level of preparedness you have for this job application.
The fact that you have highlighted your FYP experience to your job application is a wise move as you are impressing upon the HR personal as someone qualified and can fit the job requirements they have stipulated. However you might like to emphasize a bit more on the area of research of your FYP or the relevant professors that are might be key players in this field.
On a side note, maybe you could try to refine certain phases in your letter such as “You specify that you are looking for someone…” and the “I have just finished…” You could replace them with more professional action verbs mentioned during class and in the ES 2007S website.
Hope this two cents worth of suggestions might help.
Regards,
Wei Xiong
Hi Keerth and Wei Xiong,
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for your comments and advise! Well, surely i will modify my letter again for "tomorrow" class.
See you guys in the class.
Cheers,
Ryan
Hi all,
ReplyDeleteAfter finished reading all the application letter from our class mates, i came to realize the importance of "8 second to impress". I have only read around 18 application letter (for different purpose, though), i find it extremely tiring and exhausting. I cant really imagine if i have to read 100 or even more letters.
So, rule of thumb, be concise!
Cheers,
Ryan